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Walls feel like ash,
tattered and torn.
Dead leaves drifting away,
leaving naught to morn.

Rain washes away broken shards
revealing hidden truths of lie.
Breathing life into dry death,
past torments becoming shy.

The tower blown over
by whispering winds,
giving sight to new life--
allowing the old to end.
Written: 10/11/12

This poem is about dying to the old self, the dreary past and rejuvenating into a new endeavor, a new beginning of sorts. Written merely on a whim. I can see there are a few parts that are choppy, but I do not wish to mess with this poem and ruin the emotion and intention behind it.

If you like it leave a favourite and a comment. :) I'm hoping to post a poem every other day until I am present with my writings.
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Vainamoinenian Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This was gorgeous, but I'd just STRONGLY recommend you change the very last line to sound in tune with the whole story. I understand you don't want to ruin the original complexion but definitely there are lots of ways to slightly fix that thingy, I even wrote the alternative to "allowing the old to end" in my mind :D
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Extranzia Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012  Student Writer
I'll take it into account, thank you so much! :) I'll try to be weary of such things.
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student Writer
This is such a wonderful piece! :D The theme and the choice of words are excellent. Great work!
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Everlasting90 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it. Beautiful poem of rebirth!!
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Extranzia Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad you enjoyed my work! This one was fun to write. :)
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YoshiofRedemption Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student General Artist
Wonderful!
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Extranzia Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much. :)
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YoshiofRedemption Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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