The stars above dazzling and whirling, as we play our insignificant games The summer nights where our memories soon take form and create hidden names
The things we created became so near We sought to grasp at the moonlight Our shadows dancing along with us Maybe we will find dreams tonight
Let's forget the past of winter's words and find the radiant truth of summer's song To discover hidden realms of our desire as we get caught up in the swaying throng
This is merely the beginning of the end Time to seek the beauty of fleeting moments Like the shooting stars flashing before us we surround each other in passionate descents
Pursue the spectre of blinking fireflies As we lay down together and begin to sleep Praying that one day our neverland will come So summer's song will remember our love to keep
The inspiration from this poem came from my experiences with friends as of late as well as the song Iris by the Goo Goo Dolls [link] .
This writing style is a little different for me, being somewhat metaphorical as well as deeply romantic with some sensuality. I enjoyed writing this poem for it expresses lately how I feel, though I do not have someone special in my life at this time, but somehow it feels like I do.
"I don't want the world to see me, because I don't think that they'd understand. When everything's made to be broken, I just want you to know who I am. I just want you to know who I am." -Iris by the Goo Goo Dolls
Very nice. Good descriptors, imagery. I do think it has impact, though I have to agree with Forgotten-Reaper when I say it isn't an original idea. Though I'd disagree from the rest of his critique and say I personally didnt find it to be rushed or jarring.
I asked Reaper specifically since a lot, if not all, his poems are set in stone and I wished to attempt a poem that was relatively set in stone, since the rest of my poems tend to vary in form. I can see where he meant what he did as well as with your input.
The idea is very wide spread but I have never attempted the topic so I thought I would give it a shot for the first time. I did focus on the imagery/descriptors a lot more than I tend to do in this poem, so glad that you considered them to be good as well as having impact.
I take it all into account and I am very appreciative, again!
I love the Goo Goo dolls and I can sing that song in the author's comment by heart. That said, this poem was exquisite; simply because it brought to light the joy of the memories we form in the company of friends. I have not had much of that warmth given my old personality and prickly nature, but somewhere in the past, I was happy and it keeps me moving through the darker days
I am glad that it stirred that thought in you. Though you may have darker days, however, remember that night is only temporary and the sun will rise again.
I asked Reaper specifically since a lot, if not all, his poems are set in stone and I wished to attempt a poem that was relatively set in stone, since the rest of my poems tend to vary in form. I can see where he meant what he did as well as with your input.
The idea is very wide spread but I have never attempted the topic so I thought I would give it a shot for the first time. I did focus on the imagery/descriptors a lot more than I tend to do in this poem, so glad that you considered them to be good as well as having impact.
I take it all into account and I am very appreciative, again!
-Chen
-Chen