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"I need rest," she murmurs under the copper dyed hues of sunset's leaves.
"Why don't you lie down for a while?" He looks down upon her, intentions of night in his dark eyes.
"I need rest," she whispers as the colour begins to steadily fade.
"Then nod your head, there's naught to fear," he smiles, stardust coating his cold breath.
"I need rest," she sighs as the last of sun's warmth departs her core.
"Take a seat, my love," he encircles as a panther would its prey.
"I need rest," a cry as soft as a dove flees her lips.
"Lift your feet, one shan't stand for too long," he becomes a shadow looming.
"I need rest," her eyes of summer look up, dreams departing.
"My shoulder is here for you," he coldly offers, deceit dripping with every word.
"I need rest," her hands delicate as fall reach like struggling branches in winter winds.
"Let me hold you," his arms of greed reach forth with malintent.
"I need rest," her breaths cast away by the humming breeze.
"There's a pillow nearby," his callous fingers trace looming paths.
"I need rest," her hair trailing, losing its shine.
"Don't be shy," fangs of broken glass shine in his smile.
"I need rest," harmony trickles down her weakening frame.
"Then let it go," temptations wrangle his body.
"I need rest," innocence cries from her heart.
"There's a bed below," he forces near.
"I need rest," her figure falters.
"Anytime now," he leans over in anticipation.
"I need rest," she fights in vain.
"Rest my child," his presence overwhelming her.
"...rest," she succumbs, his obsession complete.
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100 Themes: Obsession
Written: 11/18/12

Finally redid this theme. I can't really say where inspiration struck for this idea, though I am quite surprised about how chilling it came to be. I have never written something like this, let alone in this tone. I definitely went outside the box. This seems a bit short, but I didn't want to overdo such repetition.

All in all, this incorporates how at times one's obsession or perseverance to gain something can in turn wreak havoc on another. How society can on one's persona until they succumb to the consistent badgering. Or how two lovers enter a dangerous dance after one's advances. Even someone entangled in depression. There are many an analogy for such a presence, it's up to you to decide.
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~Will7744 Nov 20, 2012  Professional Writer
like it - you spin a nice web here for your poor heroine
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~Extranzia Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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~februaryblue Nov 19, 2012  Student Writer
You're right when you said that it's chilling, it's definitely chilling. I love how you've characterized these people without giving them names and just with the dialogue tags. "He looks down upon her, intentions of night in his dark eyes" is my favorite.
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~Extranzia Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for your input :) That line was my favourite too!
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~februaryblue Nov 24, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome. :D (Well clearly, we have good taste! haha)
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~Extranzia Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Great minds think alike ;)
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~YoshiofRedemption Nov 19, 2012  Student General Artist
Impressive. It feels so realistic, like the reader is actually a part of the story
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~Extranzia Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm so glad it achieved that! Thank you so much :)
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~YoshiofRedemption Nov 24, 2012  Student General Artist
you're welcome!
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:iconxneverxtherexforxmex:
This chilled me. Well written and stunning imagry!
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