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Cut my chest open,
let me bleed.
Find my soul
and set it free.

Tears of red,
cries unheard.
Leave me be,
life's a blur.

Alone she treads
now forgotten,
mist in moonlight,
a mirror broken.

Find withered dreams
in torn up pages,
for death is gained
in memory's pain.
Written: 10/09/12
This poem is essentially about the damages that can arise from dwelling in the past. Through focusing on things gone, one loses the ability to appreciate the present and the hope of the future which becomes quite damaging to the persona, mind and so on.

I wasn't sure about this poem and I asked a few whether or not I should keep it but in the end I decided to take a stand for myself and have this poem remain present.

I used the traditional form of alliteration being the same vowel sounds in every other line in each stanza. It was a different style of writing since I prefer concrete rhyme as of late, so I would appreciate a comment with your opinion. :)

By the way, I am back. Writing has been more affluent in my life though my presence on the internet has not. I hope to try and post more when I can scratch the time together.

Edit: In the tops for Popular Literature! It's been a while. :) Thanks all!
Edit: Top for 8 Hours on the front page! That's a first!
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Recklys Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student Writer
just amazing o__o
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Extranzia Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student Writer
Why thank you! Also, for the favourite~ :)
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Pandor17 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Student Artist
I can visualize this so perfectly!!! Her chest is slitted open and her soul pours out as a thick cloud of smoke, billowing up in rage and pain... Just wonderful :D I can relate to this, since I've been really frustrated these days
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Extranzia Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student Writer
That's a beautiful yet morose illustration, that's rad yet a tad scary that such things came to your mind through my writing. Just the power of words, eh?

Thank you for enjoying and leaving a comment, it means a lot! :)
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Pandor17 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Student Artist
You're welcome!
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XxMidnight-SilencexX Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, it's unbelievable how easy it is to relate to this! It really reaches deep, and it's so beautifully put together - great job, I love it! :la:
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Extranzia Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad that it struck a chord for you, that was my initial goal. Thank you~
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XxMidnight-SilencexX Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome, I'm definitely adding you to my watch list. ^^ Keep up the good work~
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Extranzia Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you again! :) :hug:
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theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
beautiful!!!
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